MISSED CONNECTION: (I should note I don't see this person that often).
You're a PhD student and for the past few times I've seen you, I've struggled to tell you how I feel.
Resorting to social media would probably do me no good, but each time I write it helps me deal.
Poetry is where I shine most of the time, and I'd like to say I'm glad you're a friend of mine.
However many months ago something inside of me changed; it was like a chime.
I felt a warmth in my heart that for the longest time seemed estranged.
So the last time I dropped by your workplace to see you because my feelings developed, changed.
But you were not there and my heart was in despair, and I waited as long as I could.
But sadly I had to leave, yet see you again I knew I would.
I see you whenever I can, and my heart flutters when you appear.
My mind might be scrambling for words but my feelings for you I know are clear.
We have spoken maybe less than a normal conversation,
But I guarantee neither of us missed the endearing flirtation.
I know not whether you have a girlfriend, but like any crush I hope that's not the case.
For next time I see you I shall ask for your company with the utmost grace.
Please give me a chance and I'll show you a wonderful time,
From a girl who is meek but finds comfort and meaningfulness in rhyme.
If this doesn't get you laid.... I've lost all hope in humanity
ReplyDeleteYou're terrible at poetry.
ReplyDeleteOh honey... You haven't even gotten me started. Your comment doesn't phase me buddy. Honestly, I have written better than this I will admit, but this is what I was feeling at the time. Haters gon' hate!
DeleteJust a general comment, not 2 here: Poetry is more than making sentences rhyme. You literally could have removed the spaces and this would be a paragraph. Even making some of those similes into metaphors would go a long way towards subtlety.
Deletelol so if rhyming is poetry, then some guy should come along and turn this into the worst rap song and you'd love it right? i give you my poem: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I7TUr047h7o
Delete@2b - I know that poetry is not just about making things rhyme. I've just written so much non rhyming poetry that I wanted to try rhyming again. I've been way into prose and writing fantasy. Not everyone who writes continuously writes in the same style. I write in many different ways, and this just happens to be one of them, no matter how cheesy.
DeleteLOL 2.b, you should go take ENGL 335
Delete2b here, not what I was saying at all. What I was saying is that if you are just saying exactly what you mean in plain English then there's no point. When you read real poetry its full of imagery and you need to interpret it. If someone is saying poetry is their strong point then I expect more, especially as an anonymous poster :P
Delete@2c: Yes, song lyrics get an easier time because its about the singing. Even then, the best songs are open to interpretation.
To me it doesn't matter if it's written in plain English or not, as I can appreciate both. It's my style, and I really don't care if you accept it or not. Trust me, I've written way more poetry where the meaning is hidden. Sure this poetry might not be REAL, of course I'm no Sylvia Plath or anything (God bless that woman... love her). But if I feel like writing plainly, then so be it. When you write essays you write plainly because if you write in a style where the professor always has to figure out what you say, then you won't get anywhere, at least in my experience in first year and so on. So I am terribly sorry for writing plainly because for the past four years I've been writing essays and have been told to say exactly what I want to say and explain it. It's taking me a while to get back into the swing of things, that and I've been focusing on my prose. Not t worry, I'll come up with a poem worthy enough to satisfy you :P
DeleteFair enough. Besides, if it was all convoluted it would lose value as a missed connection after all.
Deletei think this is cute. though i wish it were for me. i would write one for you back then :P
ReplyDeleteOP which department or faculty is the PhD student in?
ReplyDeleteOP here!
DeleteTo be honest I've never asked... I honestly thought about it but the words never came out. Chicken, I know, but I'm really trying to work on that. I'm great with people I meet but man there is always that one person that renders you vocally immobile, as well as physically in some cases haha :P Here's what I do know: He does his stuff in the Institute for Quantum Computing, in the labs and such. Last time when I went to see him, which was a couple days ago, he was working on some kind of experiment that involved nitrogen or something (this might narrow it down, lol), so I didn't actually see him but rather I was told that that's what he was doing. Anyway, his supervisor is a professor of Physics and Astronomy, so I want to say it's somewhere in either one of those fields of physics or something like that. It could also be likely that it's nano since it is possible to use nanotechnology to convert nitrogen oxides into nitrogen and water vapour.... and that's as far as my science will go with nanotech :P
This might not be the best detailed answer, but it certainly is a long one... sorry but that's really all I can deduce from how much I've talked to him (which like my poem says, has not been much at all), and yes, I'll admit, my scoping on the IQC faculty site. And yes, I've noticed I really need to cut down my answers.
So adorable :3
Deleteglhf
Dang. OP tell me his name and I'll go paint this poem on his bedroom walls for you. This is so adorable, touched my frozen heart.
ReplyDeleteI hate the internet!!!
ReplyDeletePoetry? Pfft my dad's a doctor.
ReplyDeleteGood for him!
DeleteEmo.
ReplyDeleteI wouldn't call myself emo. In fact, I'm a pretty positive person most of the time. Just because someone is shy to talk about their feelings to a person they like doesn't make them emo, it just makes them shy.
Deletethat is of fuckin poetic
ReplyDeletemmm.. ramen noggins!!!!!
ReplyDeletemakes me wanna get a puppy.
ReplyDeleteYo, get a puppy and i will skin u alive
ReplyDeleteHave something against puppies, my friend?
DeleteTo the girl I talk to when I can't sleep,
ReplyDeleteThis never happens,
I honestly hope u get a lifetime of blessings.
U restore my hope for humanity.
Stay innocent.
To the physically violent chick,
Ur really lucky ;) Don't worry about me.. so am I
Dear a very special person,
ReplyDeleteI hope she picks you.
Thanks you for picking me.
One day, I will get my PHD lmao in philosophy just like u.
I am a FOB hence I have a big family.
One day I will have, One kid.
And name her Fire. Or some other random name.
Whats ur type of music?
ReplyDeleteOP again, if this is directed at me. I like writing music based on people in my life or experiences I've had. The first two songs I ever wrote and composed had a sad melody to them because I had just lost my father. He is my inspiration for living my life and doing what I love to do and never taking people's crap. And if I was forced to take someone's negativity towards me, I would just pick myself back up again and fight harder. Returning to my music, I like music, whether it be the beat, the tone, or even the lyrics, that provides strength, power and excitement. Sometimes though, it doesn't hurt to let the walls down and let in a mellow melody.
DeleteNo one! ;(
ReplyDeleteThere once was a girl who wrote not in her practice range.
ReplyDeleteThis poem to most actually it seemed a bit strange.
Though she provided her words for all's amusement.
It was to one special endearing Ph.D student.
But oh wait, IMHO, she may possibly be deranged.
So people who write poetry, who express their feelings through writing is viewed as deranged? So you're labelling me as an outcast. Sure. go ahead. I'll keep writing poetry about whatever I please. The compliments (and not just from the site) certainly outweigh the negative responses. And actually, I am a little crazy. I'm hyper, funny, I say what's on my mind, and sometimes through words because that's what I like to do. We are all a little crazy in side. Or in the words of Cheshire Cat, "we're all mad here".
DeleteSatire is the use of humour, irony, exaggeration, or ridiculing.
DeleteIt also is a poetic form for criticizing.
I, too, am writing a poem as the commenter.
But clearly OP does not understand my satire.
I am sorry if OP is now butthurting.
@17 No, not deranged. Crazy often yields genius; this is just bad.
DeleteI agree.
DeleteI like you @17c.
Not butthurt at all my dear.
DeleteAhh poetry!!! English major!? :D
ReplyDeleteGod, I hope not. This is giving us a bad name. Ugh.
Delete@18a: It's no wonder the Arts faculty at UW gets made fun of if English majors write like this.
DeleteHello 18, I am an English major indeed. Now let me clear something up. When we, and it's not just English majors that do, write essays, they are serious and hard hitting... er, hopefully. They convey the message and the structure is concise, and it flows like a river. When we have to write a poem for an assignment for example, we put more thought into it than something like this, I'll admit. There are more rhetorical devices used and it's not written at 10pm at night for fun.
DeleteWhile this poem I wrote kind of has that rhyming structure, it's not meant to be taken this seriously because as I mentioned in the previous paragraph, I wrote it for fun, for people's enjoyment and sure, what the hell, criticism because that's to be expected on OMGUW. I knew that posting it and yet I STILL posted it. I like writing poetry and sometimes it might not be good, and I have accepted that. But that's what writers do, we revise and revise, and get criticized. We learn from our mistakes and use that negativity to make ourselves and our writing better. I just didn't do it for this poem.
Sometimes my poetry is great and I feel proud of myself that I still write. There have been many things in my life that have been taken away from me and I almost gave up writing because I lost hope of everything, and I've dealt with depression before because of that. I've failed classes and have considered running away from home because even there nothing that I do is praised or accepted. There, I said it, but I'll say what you're thinking: that's not an excuse for this crappy poem. But I write because I know that I love it, and as a pastime it doesn't matter if I'm good at it or not. If I choose to share something I wrote that's meant to be cute, then I'll share it, I don't care. What matters is that I LOVE it and it makes me happy amidst all the shit I've dealt with since middle school. I personally think this poem is cute and it sounds like a lot of my earlier stuff, when I started to write. It reminds me of my high school days where I shared my poetry with my classmates and my teachers, and they liked it. I kept writing because I realize that I like it, because it's actually something that I think I'm good at. Because of that I have been writing songs (and I've been composing those songs), prose, and even though I might get negative criticism, it forces me to work harder which I don't mind doing. It builds strength where there used to be weakness. I really don't mind challenging myself and you might think I'm defending myself to cover up the fact that I'm butthurt, but I'm honestly not hurt at all. This just gives me strength to work harder, and write more because I know I'm good, and this poem doesn't do me justice. I might be gutsy enough to write a poem like this on here, but so what - I would rather let it be known that some of the poetry I write isn't all that great, and that I've accepted that flaw, than hide in a corner and cry because I'm afraid of what people will say because I'm oh-so-terrified of being hated. Rejection is a real thing and for something like poetry, it doesn't phase me. I've faced it before and I'll face it again. I might get knocked down, but like all great people, artists, etc., I'll get right back up on my feet but I won't dust of the dirt because the dirt reminds me to work stronger and to rise above.
Hey OP, don't take comments here too seriously, for your own sanity.
DeleteWell put, OP. That was nice.
DeleteHaha, 18.d, it doesn't hurt to share a backstory. I'm sane enough. If I wasn't I would probably be whining and bitching at everyone who didn't like it :P
DeleteBut I do agree with you - I've been told I can't take a joke and that's something I am trying to work on.
18. hard hitting? lemme do a pop culture reference. Taeyang may try too hard and may be too intense but the contrast between him and the ppl hes surrounded with makes him funny as hell
ReplyDeleteListen buddy, quit dissing the arts faculty at waterloo. The english program is the shit ok. My best friend may not write poetry to me but he eats with me everysingle day for lunch and dinner. THOSE ARE THE RULES OK?
ReplyDeleteThe wind swept me away
ReplyDeleteI got blown to pieces
Oh look a deer.
It was really dark outside...
oh looks the star!
Oh romeo, pls be my Prince.
The Prince.
Crap, our families are warring.
Oh look! Unity!
selah.
The mighty burning fire,
hot hot hot hot.
oh why must we stay up all night arguing?
Lets just do our homework instead.
Go write me a poem!
Oh wait, u already have.
Go stick ur head in an oven bitch.
Yo, wtf? U purposely wrote a long ass poem!!!!! I'm gonna kill u
ReplyDeleteI once wrote a poem that was 13 verses long, 4 lines each. This is not considered long.
DeleteThere once was a girl,
ReplyDeleteWho got shot by her father,
She murdered him,
by slitting his throat,
Her mother and her were close,
She gave me a key,
But I lost it,
Its still in my wallet,
Oh fuck, where is it?
gather up your courage and ask him out! Otherwise you'll never know what could come of this. But perhaps the pain of not knowing is less than the pain of it not working out.
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